Friday, September 27, 2013

Home is where the heart is draft

Home is where the heart is
Looking out my window gazing
At the freshly cut lawn and the toys sprawled across the city lawn
A blue bike with flames on the sides flipped upside down at
My brother’s automobile shop, where many toy cars are waiting in line,
Sitting with content the other brother’s look on with a divine
Look upon their faces.
As I go on a walk, I begin
Around the block, a park with kids who seem to never Stop playing,
The church where people keep praying
Like it’s no tomorrow,
A small grocery store on the corner where with a ding ding  you enter the door,
The cashiers know your name
It isn’t so lame
My city is my city,
This city is where my home is for the majority of my life,
Because your home is where your heart is,
Without your home, your heart fades




Wednesday, September 11, 2013

Imagine…

Imagine all the witnesses of your life.
All the people who have seen you,
Judging you with each glance,
Good or bad views of you,
What their perception of you is.
What they think you do,
Who they think you are,
Who sees you working hard,
Or hardly working,
The color of your hair, brown, blonde, orange, black.
 The shape of your body, skinny, average, large, chubby.
Your race, white, yellow, brown, African American
The language you speak.
Everything matters to the person witnessing

We are all witnesses



The poem was revised because of the useful 2 chapters we read that had ideas for helping me revise my poem. I used the syntax and grammar section to improve this poem by choosing different words to end the line breaks. I also used the Energy of revision chapter, by using tips on page 189 by taking a look at my poem and re-arranging my poem. 

Tuesday, September 10, 2013

Imagine…your witnesses
Imagine all the witnesses of your life
All the people who have seen you,
What their perception of you is,
What they think you do,
Who sees you working hard,
Who sees you slacking,
Judging you with each glance,
Good or bad views of you,
Your hair, your body , the language you speak,
Everything matters when you’re witnessing something or someone

We are all witnesses 
Prose and Poetry from The Poet’s Companion
Bedroom
As you enter my room you will notice it is painted white all around
A poster covers the majority of a wall, on it is  a metal fence, a basketball hoop,
a partly cloudy sky with the sun peaking out in the middle of the photo,
a basketball player with high tops  dunking with his left hand outstretched in
 the Michael Jordan pose.
Beneath the poster is a wooden desk made from an ash tree that my great grandfather gave me before he passed away
On the wooden desk are mementos from my 2005 youth baseball championship trophy. Lying in front of the trophy are pictures of my mom and I
On the pictures,  my mom and I  are blowing out  the candles on my Thomas the tank engine cake, on my 2nd birthday at Minnehaha falls park, and we’re sticking our tongues out at each other on the Hawaiian floral printed futon we used to have.
A simple lamp shade colored a burnt orange color sits on the edge of the desk
To the right of my desk against the wall I have a two door closet with white paint and two metal handles, which is where my multiple jerseys and nice clothes are hanging.
If you make a 90 degree turn from the closet a twin bed with orange sheets and pillow cases is sitting against the wall next to the nightstand
On the nightstand are autographs from various athletes that I’ve received over the years,
A Justin Morneau autographed picture of him finishing his homerun,
 And Joe Mauer telling me to never give up on my dreams
 To tell time, there rests a Mickey Mouse clock undisturbed,  that I received as a birthday present when I was 7.
At the foot of my bed is my dirty clothes hamper with nothing in it at the moment.
Then to the right of the hamper is my dresser which has two wide drawers on the bottom,
 two small but deep drawers,
and two small but wide drawers in-between the two small drawers.
And that is how I perceive my room.

The blue and green striped blankie:
My little brother has had this blanket since he was born,
And from it he has never been torn,
It calms him down,
It turns his frown upside down.
Gripping it tight,
It never leaves his sight.
Without blankie,
Owen would be cranky.
And that quite frankly,

Would make many unhappy.
Prose and Poetry from The Poet’s Companion
Summer Project
Bedroom
As you enter my room you will notice it is painted white all around
A poster covers the majority of a wall, on it is  a metal fence, a basketball hoop,
a partly cloudy sky with the sun peaking out in the middle of the photo,
a basketball player with high tops  dunking with his left hand outstretched in
 the Michael Jordan pose.
Beneath the poster is a wooden desk made from an ash tree that my great grandfather gave me before he passed away
On the wooden desk are mementos from my 2005 youth baseball championship trophy. Lying in front of the trophy are pictures of my mom and I
On the pictures,  my mom and I  are blowing out  the candles on my Thomas the tank engine cake, on my 2nd birthday at Minnehaha falls park, and we’re sticking our tongues out at each other on the Hawaiian floral printed futon we used to have.
A simple lamp shade colored a burnt orange color sits on the edge of the desk
To the right of my desk against the wall I have a two door closet with white paint and two metal handles, which is where my multiple jerseys and nice clothes are hanging.
If you make a 90 degree turn from the closet a twin bed with orange sheets and pillow cases is sitting against the wall next to the nightstand
On the nightstand are autographs from various athletes that I’ve received over the years,
A Justin Morneau autographed picture of him finishing his homerun,
 And Joe Mauer telling me to never give up on my dreams
 To tell time, there rests a Mickey Mouse clock undisturbed,  that I received as a birthday present when I was 7.
At the foot of my bed is my dirty clothes hamper with nothing in it at the moment.
Then to the right of the hamper is my dresser which has two wide drawers on the bottom,
 two small but deep drawers,
and two small but wide drawers in-between the two small drawers.
And that is how I perceive my room.

Calm
My little brother has had this blanket since he was born,
And from it he has never been torn,
It calms him down,
It turns his frown upside down.
Gripping it tight,
It never leaves his sight.
Without blankie,
Owen would be cranky.
And that quite frankly,

Would make me unhappy.
Car Poem rough draft..

Mr. Car

a Stealth Prowler approaches the Ninety-Eight Explorer,
his Amigo Cooper has a thick Navajo Accent.
they Swift(ly) Sprint across the cross roads of Park Avenue,
and Fifth Avenue.
the Breeze was towards the west, as the Zephyr was blowing like Aries when he’s mad.

Shortly after a Golf ball came towards Cooper en Fuego.
Lucy Li
A bright young woman, with a great big smile,
She’ll tell you what you need to know every once in a while.
During the summer,
She doesn’t have a single bummer,
Painting elegant paintings,
And having quite the time entertaining
while she is competing for many judges
In various piano performances.

 

While tutoring in the summer
She didn’t get any dumber.
She kept her criminal record quite clean,
Except for stealing a bit of ice cream.
For community service she volunteered,
at the local nursing home where the jury feared
she would strike again,
as she was sent to math and science camp to be a counselor where she was forced to use her brain.